Sunday, August 10, 2008

Limerick 1. House of V

The House of V hosts a large spider
Who could be called, perhaps, a rough rider.
He seems so docile
Then gets incredibly vile
And puts parts of himelf inside ya.


Anonymous said...

Little Miss Muffet sat on a tuffet,
Eating her curds and whey,

Along came a spider who sat down beside her,

And frightened the living s**t out of her by trying to put his spider bits inside her.

Emeraldmist Nightfire said...

The proper limerick form rhymes the third and fourth lines and follows a common meter. (The final rhyme is often tortured, as you did so well...)

Perhaps this would do the trick:

The House of V hosts a large spider
Who could maybe be a rough rider.
Though he seems quite docile
Almost a fossil
Watch out or he'll end up inside ya!

Eaton said...

Thanks Emerald! I'd say the entire poem is pretty much tortured - and instead of being a proper one it's just an improper one :)!